By Alex Berger

By Alex Berger
By Alex Berger
By Alex Berger

by Alex Berger

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2 weeks ago
Do It For The Meme. Http://blinkingguy.com

Do it for the meme. http://blinkingguy.com

5 months ago

it's cold out there, reblog to give a trans man a cup of soump

It's Cold Out There, Reblog To Give A Trans Man A Cup Of Soump
1 month ago
Big Kitty I Saw At The Animal Sanctuary

Big kitty I saw at the animal sanctuary


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3 weeks ago
Uk Peeps!! Let’s Get This Going! 🏳️‍⚧️🇬🇧
Petition: Legally enshrine the right of adults to physically transition using NHS services
Petitions - UK Government and Parliament
Introduce a law to legally protect the right of those aged 18 and over to transition using NHS services. This should specifically cover phys

Uk peeps!! Let’s get this going! 🏳️‍⚧️🇬🇧

3 months ago
Every Day I Learn Something Baffling About Massachusetts
Every Day I Learn Something Baffling About Massachusetts

Every day I learn something baffling about Massachusetts


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2 weeks ago

some of the best writing advice I’ve ever received: always put the punch line at the end of the sentence.

it doesn’t have to be a “punch line” as in the end of a joke. It could be the part that punches you in the gut. The most exciting, juicy, shocking info goes at the end of the sentence. Two different examples that show the difference it makes:

doing it wrong:

She saw her brother’s dead body when she caught the smell of something rotting, thought it was coming from the fridge, and followed it into the kitchen.

doing it right:

Catching the smell of something rotten wafting from the kitchen—probably from the fridge, she thought—she followed the smell into the kitchen, and saw her brother’s dead body.

Periods are where you stop to process the sentence. Put the dead body at the start of the sentence and by the time you reach the end of the sentence, you’ve piled a whole kitchen and a weird fridge smell on top of it, and THEN you have to process the body, and it’s buried so much it barely has an impact. Put the dead body at the end, and it’s like an emotional exclamation point. Everything’s normal and then BAM, her brother’s dead.

This rule doesn’t just apply to sentences: structuring lists or paragraphs like this, by putting the important info at the end, increases their punch too. It’s why in tropes like Arson, Murder, and Jaywalking or Bread, Eggs, Milk, Squick, the odd item out comes at the end of the list.

Subverting this rule can also be used to manipulate reader’s emotional reactions or tell them how shocking they SHOULD find a piece of information in the context of a story. For example, a more conventional sentence that follows this rule:

She opened the pantry door, looking for a jar of grape jelly, but the view of the shelves was blocked by a ghost.

Oh! There’s a ghost! That’s shocking! Probably the character in our sentence doesn’t even care about the jelly anymore because the spirit of a dead person has suddenly appeared inside her pantry, and that’s obviously a much higher priority. But, subvert the rule:

She opened the pantry door, found a ghost blocking her view of the shelves, and couldn’t see past it to where the grape jelly was supposed to be.

Because the ghost is in the middle of the sentence, it’s presented like it’s a mere shelf-blocking pest, and thus less important than the REAL goal of this sentence: the grape jelly. The ghost is diminished, and now you get the impression that the character is probably not too surprised by ghosts in her pantry. Maybe it lives there. Maybe she sees a dozen ghosts a day. In any case, it’s not a big deal. Even though both sentences convey the exact same information, they set up the reader to regard the presence of ghosts very differently in this story.

3 months ago

i’ve never actually talked to 95% of my mutuals but that doesn’t stop me from automatically thinking “friend!!” whenever their icons pop up in my feed

2 weeks ago

I don’t know exactly how but my cats pushed the mosquito net out of the way and fell out the window again. They are indoor cats as there are coyotes where I live that will eat them. Here they are after their baths,

I Don’t Know Exactly How But My Cats Pushed The Mosquito Net Out Of The Way And Fell Out The Window
I Don’t Know Exactly How But My Cats Pushed The Mosquito Net Out Of The Way And Fell Out The Window
I Don’t Know Exactly How But My Cats Pushed The Mosquito Net Out Of The Way And Fell Out The Window
I Don’t Know Exactly How But My Cats Pushed The Mosquito Net Out Of The Way And Fell Out The Window

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